blackhawkkid
"Leave this to us!" kallen yelled as he lifted off the ground using his wings. The dragon exhaled an enormous crimson fire ball aimed straight at kallen. "SCREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!" Kallen emited a sound much like nails on a chalkboard, This sound was so powerful it hurled the crimson ball straight back at the dragon, Hitting it straight in the face. The enormous shards of ice on the dragons head melted till you could see the azure scales underneath. "RAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRRRRRGGGGGGGGGGGGGG," The dragon yowled in pain. "Ever get tired of this Kallen?" Kaz yelled up at kallen who was now dodging the enraged creatures strikes. "Maybe!" Kallen yelled back "course there isnt a whole lot i can do about-" Just then The dragon slammed Kallen into the ground. "HEY! YOU UGLY!" The dragon turned it's head down toward Kaz. "BOOSH!" The dragon slammed its front leg down on top of Kaz. "YO! UGLY!" Kaz was now seated atop the dragons head. The dragon was clearly confused. It lifted right front leg to see Kaz's shadow copy slowly melt. Kaz raised marauder's obsidian blade up above his head "VWOOSH!" a startling black fire danced across the blade, he then stabbed the blazing obsidian blade into the dragons head scales and all straight into it's brain. The dragon roared with outrage and raised its tail which shot enormous shards of shimmering blue ice at kaz who narrowly dodged in time. Jackal caught one of the ice shards with ease and with one shadowy hand hurled it back toward the dragon. The dragon spat crimson fire at the ice which melted about a yard from it's head. Kallen lifted into the air once more and charged for the dragon slashing his silver blades to block the shimmering ice missles and dodging endless crimson fire the whole way. Once he was near the dragon he searched for a chink in its azure scales, he found one right beside the dragons left eye. He took a running leap and lunged for the small chink. The enraged dragon turned it's head at last second and Kallen ended up on it's eye. " This works to i suppose."Kallen said slightly grossed out. The creature swatted at Kallen with it's front legs as it tried to dislodge kallen?s sword from its eye. Kallen then focused and pumped an explosive amount of energy into the dragons eye. The dragon screamed in pain as its eyeball exploded in its socket. Large chunks of the charred meat from the eye and kallen landed back on the tree. The azure dragon was now smashing the tree with its two front legs attempting to finish off the small pests that were attacking. Jackal cackled aloud as he floated directly in front of the creature which glared at him with a murderous intent. In a burst of shadows Jackal grew to an enormous size and smashed the dragon with his fists, shattering the rest of its icy armor, as well as doing considerable damage to the creature itself. Jackal then disappeared back to the tarot realm to rest. The dragon was on its last legs as Kallen flew up to its face and looked the hideous beast in the eye. His eyes glowed an almost neon green ?I promised myself I would save this for a real emergency but looks like you?ve asked for it ? Kallen said as he focused his energy. The creature turned tail and flew off sensing it's imminent demise. After watching the fight Gelyan had a growing interest. These two had power enough to defeat something that size with ease. These two could be useful. ?I?m sorry that I was following you, but you are all amazing and I?ve been looking for a way out of this world.? Kallen said in a calm voice as his eyes went back to their normal blue color. ?I suppose I accept your apology chicken boy, Just don?t do it again!? Nera yelled ?If Nera-jie trusts them then so do I.? Sisi said with a smile ?It?s not as if we have much of a choice.? Emi said in a slightly heavy tone. At this the trio stopped and stared at Emi. ?What do you mean?? Nera asked with a puzzled look on her face ?That was a shard tailed dragon the most powerful creature in the area. truthfully all four of us together probably couldn't have beaten that creature." At this everyone turned to stare at the duo who had defeated the amazing creature. ?You?re kidding right? That would make them almost as powerful as Reciful or Esis? Nera asked with disbelief ?I wish I could say that I was Neraine, but it appears these two are really that powerful.? Emi said calmly ?She?s right though.? Kaz said with a slight snicker ?We?re just that powerful, the strongest drifters your likely to ever meet .?Kaz said as he cleaned marauder. "Oh yeah? Wanna bet tough guy?" Nera said turning around towards Kaz. "You wouldn't stand a ch-" Nera kicked kaz in the face. ?What?s your story then? You must have attained this power somehow.? Gelyan asked ignoring Kaz and Nera fighting behind him. ?It?s simple we?ve been here for a lot longer than you Three have, three years in fact.? Kallen said with a matter of fact tone. ?THREE YEARS?!? Everyone yelled in disbelief. ?Yes three years. I found my friend over there shortly after I woke up in this world and we decided to team up for strength in numbers.?Kallen answered calmly ?Wow bird man you sure have been here for a long time.? Sisi said as she looked him over. ?My, how rude of me I suppose I haven?t introduced us yet, I?m Kallen and my shadowy friend over there?s name is Kaz? Kallen said as he pointed at Kaz. At this kaz raised a hand in greeting and then went back to cleaning marauder. ?We have been trying to find a way out of this world.?Kallen said ?I?ve been watching you three because you seemed to know what was going on. What we know we gathered from watching you along your journey.? ?Wait so you?ve been watching us since we got here? Why didn?t you just come introduce yourselves??Sisi asked ?Well we weren?t sure whether you were dangerous or not. ?Kallen said ?Yeah and bird boy over here was shy.? Kaz said as he finished cleaning marauder of the scarlet dragon blood that had stained it. This statement caused kallen avoid the eyes of the others. ?Well you?re here now and I have a plan to help you all to escape.? Emi said in a calm fashion. ?I assume it has something to do with this acronia you seem to be heading to?? Kallen said ?Well yes but how did you-" " I have more than just the wings of a hawk I also have the senses of one.? Kallen cut in. ?I overheard the conversation you were having before your eagle eyed little friend nearly glued me to a tree.? Kallen said in a slightly irritated tone. Everyone turned to look at gelyan who pretended to look over at something interesting to his right. ?So I suppose we team up to get out of here?? Kallen asked ?Agreed.? Nera said shaking kallen?s hand. ?So what?s the plan Emi?? Gelyan asked ?We?re heading for the temple city of acronia, Thousands of years ago the god of the skies ramindio took the shape of a young boy to help guide our world in the correct direction. One day a warrior came to the acronia searching for a place to stay. The warrior had come out of nowhere with strange clothes and an odd weapon. When no one else would take him in ramindio found him and took him to his house and asked what had happened. The warrior said he had been running from a fearsome enemy and had stepped into a cave to escape him when he came out the other end he was near the city. When ramindio further questioned the man he realized that there was only one possible answer this man was not from this world. When the man took ramindio back to the cave ramindio made the warrior a minor god and had a temple built for him over top of the cave. My plan is to go to the temple of passage as it was named and send you through the tunnel. I believe this will bring you back to your world.?Everyone became quiet as the story ended. ?Shall we get going then? We must have quite a ways to go.? Kallen said breaking the silence ?Yes, but there is one small problem.? ?Which is?? Kallen asked ?Acronia is across the sea of the sky which is said to be home to countless monsters. The cost of that trip would be tremendous. We would never find someone to take us with the amount of money I brought.? Emi said in a almost panicked tone. Kallen pondered the for a moment. ?What do you use as currency around here? Is there anywhere we could get more?? Nera asked ?We use a special mineral called chromia. Its mined in the black mountains which are also across the sea of the sky.? ?Well is there anything else? Otherwise we can?t really do anything? Kallen asked ? There is one thing we could sell for chromia.? Emi said. ?Which is?? Gelyan asked with a small hand gesture. ?Cloud hopper eggs.? Emi said with a light hint of disgust. ?What? We cant steal those cute little fuzzies for no reason emi-jie .Isnt there any other way?? sisi asked in a begging tone. ?I?m sorry sisi but there?s nothing else worth enough. I don?t like it either but it must be done.?Emi said with a slight frown. ?Lets get going then.? Kaz said as he stood up and spooked everyone as he had been quiet for so long. And off they went to go hunt down some cloudhoppers.Sry there is so much talking in this chapter it was all gonna have to be explained at some point so I guess now was the best time. Hope you enjoyed the second chap
raf9900
Firstly, i'm not a very experienced writer, but i wrote enough already to know that, when you feel blocked, it's best not to force yourself to write, or it won't end nicely. Take some time, let you imagination recover it's flow and then continue. Well, at least that is my opinion.I see you haven't done much editing in this work yet, hence the huge paragraph. Because of that, i won't bother you on typos, commas and stuff like that for now. I'll just note some points in the story:quoteoQUOTE quotecEveryone pulled their weapons.QuoteEndQuoteEEndI though they were just having a fight. You can either say they put away their weapons last chapter, or take off this phrase.quoteoQUOTE quoteckallen screeched in an ear ringing tone that actually reflected the fireball into the dragon's head.QuoteEndQuoteEEndI wouldn't use the word actually. It seems uninspired to me. I recoment using something like "somehow", "surprisingly", "for X's surprise" or something among that line.quoteoQUOTE quotecThe enormous shards of ice on the dragons head melted till you could see the scales underneath.QuoteEndQuoteEEndThis description looks good, but you forgot to mention these scales before. I would advise against that, because very few people would imagine that dragon with ice shards unless you told about them on the first description.quoteoQUOTE quotecHis eyes glowed green as he prepared his final attack on the creature.QuoteEndQuoteEEndI don't think you should tell that he was about to use his final attack like that. If you instead note the power he was focusing was something out of scale, or note some line/though that gives a clue of that, It would be better. For example:quoteoQUOTE quotecKallen then spoke:"I would have kept this to something important, but you asked for it."QuoteEndQuoteEEndOf course, it depends on what caracter you are building for him. If you don't want him to talk, you can make someone else notice that or though about that.Overall, the story of the action seems nice, and enough to show they are pretty powerful. If you edit this when more inspired, it would end up very nicely even in the worst-case scenario. Just make sure you don't give up! I'll also be wachting you, just in case... (<O>_<O&
macfluffers
PARAGRAPHS. You really need to indent or space apart your paragraphs! Your writing is hard to read otherwise.Your sense of scale is strange. I have no idea how big the dragon is; before I imagined something the size of a bus, but apparently it can spit out ice shards the size of elephants, so it must be bigger. And if so, then what kind of tree was it sitting on, anyway?And it's not just physical scale that's a problem. There's also the scale of danger. It's fine for your characters to fight a dangerous creature, but to fight something so dangerous only one person has lived to see one and talk about it so suddenly without cause or reason is rather silly and a bit jarr
blackhawkkid
hh macfluffers raf you two never disapoint i'm sure glad you looked it over btw i made some changes in the last chapter that you might want to look at for example in the end i changed to say the dragon landed next to the tree with its head poked above the tree top this dragon is MASSIVE i'm obviously going to put more discription and such into it once i get to editing but i will likely save much of the editing for when i have the full chapter much like last time plz note that this is my first action scene i was half expecting you to tell me to trim it down a bit. i'll get working on the editting right away becuase i still dont quite have my writers block fixed i''ll edit it then probably edit again when i have the full thing up. once again ty for the critique i appreciate you taking your time to critique my work i'll keep pumping it out as long as i have people who are reading. i'll update this weekend when i have the full thing writen. have a good day and keep watch i'll have this writen completely by the week
blackhawkkid
his has been updated! plz criti
raf9900
quoteo(post=7599:date=Aug 31 2011, 09:36 PM:name=talonkid13)QUOTE (talonkid13 @ Aug 31 2011, 09:36 PM) quotecSry there is so much talking in this chapter it was all gonna have to be explained at some point so I guess now was the best time. Hope you enjoyed the second chapter.QuoteEndQuoteEEndHmm, I really don't mind the talking. The story seems to be shaping, witch is good. At least now we know where they are going and why. So far, so good. Now the recomendations:- You don't need to split up long lines in various quotes. I think there's a part when Kallen gets three quotes in a row, and I don't think this is necessary. Other than that, one or two extra vocals and you should be fine on dialogue.- Caracter development, I would sugest. Unless i'm wrong, you told us it would come in this chapter. I'm working on that too, and apparently it's a big thing on a fan fic. My tip is to try to spending some time in the third chapter doing t
blackhawkkid
hh raf i am sry that i forgot to do some character development i forgot bout that completely but as they move along trust me there will be character development. O and i'm thinking bout holding a character contest i need bout five characters for the next chapter. think i should? i'm running out of character ideas and it would let me take a load of my brain. good luck on your fanfic to by the way i've read most of it just havent had the time to finish reading
raf9900
The caracter contest... I really don't know if you should do it or not. I once thought about making my own, but I noticed how some posters on those treads aren't nearly as active today as they were on that time. To name a few, you don't have Stragas, Chammomile and AnimeMaster like other ones had.Be sure that, if you do create a contest, I'll sign up right away. I'm really ichting to create some new caracters. The other people... well, I can't speak for t
blackhawkkid
a raf idk myself whether or not many people would want to but still i really need the load off my mind. plus i think it gives me a good chance to see if anyone is reading that hasnt posted here or on the first chap
dragoonalpha
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blackhawkkid
mg i'm lmao i just posted that on random talk thr
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joshyface
QUOTE (talonkid13 @ Aug 31 2011, 06:36 PM) quotecEmi watched as the legendary creature landed next to the tree. It was a shard tail dragon. This was the most dangerous kind of creature in the area. Only one other person had ever seen one and survived.coloro:#FF0000/coloro(If only one person had seen it and survived I would not believe it existed.)colorc/colorc The enormous creature looked the group over then let out an ear splitting roar and lifted its front legs onto the large tree. This dragon was enormous and covered in an ice plating several yards thick. Kallen pulled his swords. "Leave this to us!" Kallen yelled as he lifted off the ground using his wings.coloro:#FF0000/coloro(I REFUSE TO EDIT THIS NEXT PARAGRAPH UNTIL YOU SEPARATE IT INTO MORE MANAGEABLE SECTIONS. THIS IS DUMB: you can split this into at least three paragraphs, there is no need for this wall. Also you are giving so much detail. Give me some imagery: something more interesting than "he did this. then that one did that. etc". Imagery makes the passage more rateable to you audience.)colorc/colorcThe dragon breathed out a fire ball aimed straight at Kallen. Kallen screeched in an ear ringing tone that amazingly reflected the fireball into the dragon's head. The enormous shards of ice on the dragons head melted till you could see the scales underneath. It let out an earth shattering roar in pain and swung towards Kallen with its claws. Kaz was at this point close to the dragons head along with Jackal. The dragon tried to eat Kaz but when it bit down nothing was there the shadow he had formed as bait had worked. He was now seated atop the dragons head. He raised marauder up above his head and it lit up with black fire, he then stabbed into the dragons head going through its scales and into its head. The dragon roared with outrage and raised its tail which shot enormous Ice shards the size of elephants at kaz who jumped clear just in time. Jackal actually caught one of the ice shards and hurled it back at the dragon. The dragon shot fire and melted it just in time. Kallen lifted into the air once more and charged for the dragon slashing ice and dodging fireballs the whole way. Once he was near the dragon he searched for a chink in its scales he found one right beside the dragons left eye. He took a running leap and stabbed at the chink with his sword. When the dragon moved a bit to look at him he accidentally hit its eye. This had about the same effect as hitting the chink would have had the creature swatted at Kallen with its arms as it tried to dislodge kallen?s sword from its eye. Kallen then focused and pumped magic into the sword and thus into the dragons eye. The dragon screamed in pain as its eyeball exploded in its socket. Large chunks of it and kallen landing back on the tree. The dragon was now smashing the tree with its legs attempting to finish off the small pests that were attacking it. Jackal was now floating in front of the dragon then in a burst of shadows he became enormous and smashed the dragon with his fist shattering the rest of its icy armor, as well as doing considerable damage to the creature itself. Jackal then disappeared back to the tarot realm to rest. The dragon was on its last legs as kallen flew up to its face and looked the hideous beast in the eye. His eyes glowed green ?I told myself I would save this for a real emergency but looks like you?ve asked for it ? Kallen said as he focused his energy. The creature turned and flew off before Kallen could kill it.After watching the fight Emi was utterly amazed. These two had power enough to defeat a shard tailed dragon without using their full power. These two had astounding abilities. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(when did emi become an expert on otherworldly things. As far as we know, Emi only knows about her world. She had no relation to timelines before sisi came along.)colorc/colorc?I?m sorry that I was following you, but you are all amazing and I?ve been looking for a way out of this world.? Kallen said in a calm voice as his eyes went back to their normal blue color. Emi stared at the duo in amazement.coloro:#FF0000/coloro(why on earth is emi amazed by everything. IT is an annoying character traits, and it isn't even hers. You cannot rewrite characters on a whim.)colorc/colorc ?I suppose I accept your apology chicken boy, Just don?t do it again!? Nera yelled ?I don?t trust them.? Gelyan said with a glare. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(I don't understand where you are getting the impression gely cares what happens to the others. He is clever and manipulative, having more people around would open new opportunities.)colorc/colorc ?If Nera-jie trusts, them then so do I.? sisi said with a smile ?It?s not as if we have much of a choice.? Emi said in a slightly heavy tone. At this the trio stopped and stared at Emi. "What do you mean?? Nera asked with a puzzled look on her face. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(Sisi is the questioner not nera.)colorc/colorc?That was a shard tailed dragon the most powerful creature in the area. The four of us together probably couldn?t have defeated that monstrosity.? Emi said. At this everyone?s eyes widened and they all turned to stare in awe at the duo who had defeated the amazing creature.coloro:#FF0000/coloro(WHEN DID EMI BECOME AN EXPERT ON OTHER WORLDS. Also, gely would make that correlation way before emi.)colorc/colorc?You?re kidding right? No one is really that powerful are they?? Nera asked with disbelief. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(Esis, gen, The warden. I think you are making this dragon sound much stronger than it really is. It sounds like a cute baby.)colorc/colorc?I wish I could say that I was Neraine, but it appears these two are really powerful.? Emi said calmly.?She?s right though.? Kaz said with a slight snicker. ?We?re just that powerful, the strongest drifters your likely to ever meet .? He cleaned marauder. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(>.> this should piss the shit out of nera.)colorc/colorc?What?s your story then? You must have attained this power somehow.? Gelyan asked questioningly. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(Why on earth are all of your characters curious. I doubt nera cares how powerful they are, she will pummel their faces in anyway.)colorc/colorc?It?s simple we?ve been here for a lot longer than you Three have, three years in fact.? Kallen said with a matter of fact tone. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(I don't think you understand how the dream world thing works. When you sleep you go there and then when you wake up you are not there anymore. Stop making this more complicated.)colorc/colorc?THREE YEARS?!? Everyone yelled in surprise.coloro:#FF0000/coloroI would have used disbelief, but never the less.colorc/colorc ?Yes, three years. I found my friend over there shortly after I woke up in this world and we decided to team up for strength in numbers.? Kallen answered calmly. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(EVERYONE IN THIS IS MONOTONE. GIVE me someone who is angry. It was kinda a big trait of nera's to have a short temper.)colorc/colorc?Wow, bird man you sure have been here for a long time.? Sisi said as she looked him over.?My, how rude of me I suppose I haven?t introduced us yet, I?m Kallen and my shadowy friend over there?s name is Kaz? Kallen said as he pointed at Kaz. At this Kaz raised a hand in greeting and then went back to cleaning marauder.?We like you have been trying to find a way out of this world.?coloro:#FF0000/coloro(not their goal. In WoG they seem to enjoy traveling dimensions.)colorc/colorc Kallen said. ?I?ve been watching you three because you seemed to know what was going on. What we know we gathered from watching you along your journey.??Wait so you?ve been watching us since we got here? Why didn?t you just come introduce yourselves?? Sisi asked. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(there are more types of reactions than questioning.)colorc/colorc?Well we weren?t sure whether you were dangerous or not. ?Kallen said?Yeah and bird boy over here was shy.? Kaz said as he finished cleaning marauder of the scarlet dragon blood that had stained it. This statement caused kallen avoid the eyes of the others.?Well you?re here now and I have a plan to help you all to escape.? Emi said in a calm fashion.coloro:#FF0000/coloro(WHEN DID EMI BECOME SO INFORMED ON OTHER DIMENSIONS.) colorc/colorc?I assume it has something to do with this acronia you seem to be heading to?? Kallen said. ?Well yes but how did you?""I have more than just the wings of a hawk I also have the senses of one.? Kallen cut in. ?I overheard the conversation you were having before your eagle eyed little friend nearly glued me to a tree.? Kallen said in a slightly irritated tone. Everyone turned to look at gelyan who pretended to look over at something interesting to his right.?So I suppose we team up to get out of here?? Kallen asked?Agreed.? Nera said shaking kallen?s hand. coloro:#FF0000/coloro(Nera would take them as prisoners before she just readily accepted them. Look how she treated gely when they first met.)colorc/colorc?So what?s the plan Emi?? Gelyan asked.?We?re heading for the temple city of acronia, Thousands of years ago the god of the skies ramindio took the shape of a young boy to help guide our world in the correct direction. One day a warrior came to the acronia searching for a place to stay. The warrior had come out of nowhere with strange clothes and an odd weapon. When no one else would take him in ramindio found him and took him to his house and asked what had happened. The warrior said he had been running from a fearsome enemy and had stepped into a cave to escape him when he came out the other end he was near the city. When ramindio further questioned the man he realized that there was only one possible answer this man was not from this world. When the man took ramindio back to the cave ramindio made the warrior a minor god and had a temple built for him over top of the cave. My plan is to go to the temple of passage as it was named and send you through the tunnel. I believe this will bring you back to your world.? Everyone became quiet as the story ended. coloro:#FF0000/coloroSame issue i have with all your other emi lines. colorc/colorc?Shall we get going then? We must have quite a ways to go.? Kallen said breaking the silence"Yes, but there is one small problem.? ?Which is?? Kallen asked?Acronia is across the sea of the sky which is said to be home to countless monsters. The cost of that trip would be tremendous. We would never find someone to take us with the amount of money I brought.? Emi said in a almost panicked tone. Kallen pondered the for a moment. coloro:#FF0000/colorolook to other emi quotescolorc/colorc?What do you use as currency around here? Is there anywhere we could get more?? Nera asked?We use a special mineral called chromia. Its mined in the black mountains which are also across the sea of the sky.? coloro:#FF0000/colorowho said thiscolorc/colorc?Well is there anything else? Otherwise we can?t really do anything? Kallen asked?There is one thing we could sell for chromia.? Emi said.?Which is?? Gelyan asked with a small hand gesture.?Cloud hopper eggs.? Emi said with a light hint of disgust.coloro:#FF0000/colorocloud hoppers are in this world too, i am just checking.colorc/colorc?What? We cant steal those cute little fuzzies for no reason emi-jie .Isnt there any other way?? sisi asked in a begging tone coloro:#FF0000/coloropleadedcolorc/colorc.?I?m sorry sisi but there?s nothing else worth enough. I don?t like it either but it must be done.?Emi said with a slight frown.?Lets get going then.? Kaz said as he stood up and spooked everyone as he had been quiet for so long. And off they went to go hunt down some cloudhoppers.QuoteEndQuoteEEndThere are more issues, but I am really lazy and almost on forum break. So deal with it. I will probably do another edit later, because there more things I need to say.General comments:YOU CANNOT REWRITE (at least in the exposition) A CHARACTERS PERSONALITY, KNOWLEDGE OF LAND, ETC
blackhawkkid
osh idk why but i think you and me have some opposing ideas on emi. the fact that they could defeat the dragon was the incredible part its not that she knew about other dimentsions she always struck me as the informed type though thus she knows a bit about power(SHE CALLS FRICKING LIGHTNING FROM THE HEAVENS!)i'm not saying that maybe i shouldnt change some of these things just saying your arguement about the fact that she doesnt know much on the demensions thing but she has some smarts ok. now other than that i thank you for the full critique i'll take it into considerat
joshyface
QUOTE (talonkid13 @ Sep 27 2011, 07:05 PM) quotecThe fact that they could defeat the dragon was the incredible part its not that she knew about other dimensions she always struck me as the informed type though thus she knows a bit about power(SHE CALLS FRICKING LIGHTNING FROM THE HEAVENS!)I'm not saying that maybe i shouldn't change some of these things just saying your argument about the fact that she doesn't know much on the dimensions thing but she has some smarts, okay. now other than that i thank you for the full critique I'll take it into consideration.QuoteEndQuoteEEndI shouldn't even reply to this, but whatever. a. Emi seemed informed because it was her world and more importantly where she lives. Do you know things most wouldn't about where you live? Obviously, because you live there. b. Emi is just some girl Sisi met from another dimension, she does not actually have a critical role in the story. The only people who know information on other worlds would be Esis, Gen, members of the warden. c. I don't get your magic argument, what does her being able to conjure lightning have to do with anything. Sisi can blast people with fire, does that mean she knew things about cloud hoppers before she entered that world?d. EMI IS NOT FROM THAT DIMENSION, THE ONLY REASON THEY COULD USE HER BEFORE WAS BECAUSE SHE WAS FROM THAT DIMENSION. EMI DOES NOT HAVE A VAST WEALTH OF KNOWLE
raf9900
To be honest, I never saw much in Emi's personality. That's one of the reasons I haven't kept the same timeline for my fan
blackhawkkid
.O x face palms self x i think i got the miscommunication that came here. did i ever say they switched worlds? they didnt. thats where your confused here.i thought it was strange. i'll go back to the first and make that clearer. but its the same world is suppose the only way to put this is that they didnt switch worlds because the key esis gave them didnt work. anyhow that clear up some thi
joshyface
QUOTE (talonkid13 @ Aug 25 2011, 06:06 PM) quotecIt had been a week since the group defeated Reciful and finished off their memory driftings, they were now laying around the fire.QuoteEndQuoteEEndAn has not released a version where they have beaten Reciful. At the end of the first game, they are chasing after him and to do that they have to travel dimensions. THEREFORE, for them to have beaten Reciful they most likely would be in a different world. Fix it, or my points still st
raf9900
e's got you there. And my argument is still valid either
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