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Chen AnalysisOkay, Anime, saw your post and I thought that everything was great and good for An? and unlike Mokona, I don?t think your weapon is godmoded at all? just that it needs a bit of? editing.Okay, going to the bio, awesome. I am a little skeptical in realism on how smart your character is, but we can all have insane intelligence, so it is fine. As for age and parents? awesome. Kind of reminded me of some of Gensis characters in style of how they were written. Personality? Loved it. A bit antisocial and random? it is not out of the ?cheesy? character spectrum, but definitely something to work with. (Btw, anyone with ?no emotion? or ?antisocial? gets a BIG FAT zero on my personality vote? and anyone with ?multiple personality? or ?bipolar? gets a negative? although I guess if you were good with it, I wouldn?t care as much.)Okay, now here?s a problem: weapons. It seems like you put a decent thought to it, and I could imagine the attacks animated. At the same time, I believe that there are WAY too many attacks that you need to pick and choose some. I have some suggestions, and since I got no idea just how far you can go with your imagination, I will write them and you can go from there, and edit as you please.1) Weapon Types: Okay, your weapon is opposite. One is light and other is heavy. One is fast and other is? well, I gotta say slow. One is graceful, the other is brutal. I like. However, I believe that I find it impossible for you to fight in melee with two swords at once. So? I suggest that you can only wield one at a time. That?ll make you have two normal attacks? one fast, quick attacks, and one very slow, but massive attack.2) Scrap Dragon or Change it: Yin Yang? and dragon?. WAYYYY too overused. Someone is going to file a lawsuit for brining this up XP. Now, if you had a decent abilities about dragon, I think it is fine for you to do so. However? not really at this case. What you can do, though, is to have dragons come out and attack with you whenever you fight using certain swords. Like? when you attack with White blade, Yang dragon pops up and attacks with you? or just have it float around and have cool animation.3) Scrap ?Greater? and ?Lesser?: You just have WAY too many attacks. And I suggest something else: for your high-tier attacks, make your two swords merge into one, making a YinYang sword which has both the properties? heavy yet light, graceful yet brutal, fast yet decisive. During this form. You can fire ?bullets,? which is basically your attack except it won?t be you throwing swords, but summoning dart-like objects. Emitting fire and explosion? that is fine as well. And having double dragon animation is also epic as well.So basically what I did was just clarify your ability so that everyone can understand? if I understood your ability correctly. You basically have? five attacks: atk with white, atk with black, combo white projectile, combo black projectile, and combo explosion sword. It gets simpler, right?Exan, Odette, and Usama commentsOkay, because Exan, Odette, and Usama are relatively? FLAWLESS? you are off the hook, cham. You and your awesome ability to make blameless characters?.But if I MUST comment? why does everyone make light, athletic built characters wield heavy weapons are beyond me. Those poor characters will be stunted in their growth for life? oh the horror!!!Other than that? you have yourself a solid, AVERAGE team. Now, I am saying that because it really didn?t catch my attention as much. I think you turned conservative and less flashy on your character after EL commented you, but I think you are much better than this? so? add more detail on your character? Please???Answers for MokonaXP, you just are not thinking. Instead of BIGGEST DAMN THING IN EXISTANCE, try something equitable, like gauntlets, gloves, braces, rings, etc. These weapons can give superhuman strength, which allows Millie to wield anything or just throw crap around? kinda like Samson XDAs for bladed whips and wires? well, honestly, there are a lot of examples of epicness with bladed whips and wires, that I thought you could do something with?em.Again, I want to emphasize that the Millennia is a concept of forever. So I think that they should be representative of their name. Millie just had her concept of forever? everlasting, never ending concept of youth, which is powerful and all-capable. I wish that Ennie could be the same. I don?t want to give that away yet, but maybe you can try?Answer for FuryTransformation? XP? that sounds a little off from your fury attacks.Actually, believe it or not, I think that your character, given that it uses quick succession moves to wear down the enemy, kind of stormy feeling. What I would suggest in place of transformation would be a flashbang of sort? make it one and possibly your only cannon ability where you get an area of effect going? where everyone who is in range is stunned as if they have seen a lightning struck down. That would help with the storm part, eh?Hmmm? I don?t think that you need to be a tanker, because high agility and dex means that you can avoid many attacks. Having all element is also good, since you could probably kill the enemy before it can retaliate for the most part. As for bosses? I think you got me correct, quick successions of critical attacks are more than capable of wearing down the enemy. I think I like your character?s attacks! Very interesting.NoteAsk me any questions you like, and I will try my best to answer them. BUT REMEMBER THAT THESE ARE ONLY MY SUGGESTIONS. You don?t have to follow them, and you can always say ?shut up! I?m doing this my way NOOB!? and I?ll respect that opinion.Oh and fyi, Mokona, thought you will have your hands full with millennia and I decided not to comment on your other characters? I will later along with others!
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/coloroStrages, if you might recheck might character you will see that I have edited him substantially. Including name his attacks, giving them a more detailed description, the off list what the main perks would be. (Like how Gelyan has ranged attacks but can't attack and move.) As well as added why his surname is Japanese even through his father is English... and explaining the Transformation Mechanic. Edit: Also added the animation for the attacks... Well the animation I would prefer. Edit 2: Also expanded on the bio a bit. Edit 3: Right, that's the bio complete... I think I'll stop their and start working on my second character now. I'll leave the remaining perks for An to do. Not done. Full Name: Venator Nickname or Preferred name (Optional): BladeAge (Optional): 28Birthplace (Optional): Certo, a planet filled with primal humans which pheniox blood running through their viens. They are in a constant state war.Physical Appearance: Tall, with a well toned body. Plae skinned but darked haired. Wears dark glasses over his eyes. Wears a black t-shirt with a harness over it. The harness is attacked to a belt that keeps his long trousers ups. Biography: Venator is 'The Blade', the champion of his tribe that the fighting experaince of all the past champions, as well as their weapon. The weapon of his tribe is a 'fusion sword' a mssive weapon that in reality is nine interlocked blades.Personality: Venator is determined guy, wanting to what is best for his tribe, through he is not willing to sacrfice his honour. He says that all he face in battle must be killed, and any that defeat him must kill him, otherwise his honour will forever be tarnished. Weapon: Fusion Swords. 9 swords that can interlock to make one big sword, which is its default appearance Fighting Style (Optional): Venator has no one distinct fighting style. Because of the experiance passed down to him, and because his weapon is suited to such a way of fighting. Venator can fight in almost any role ? a Jack-off-all Trades if you will - and this ? his flexibility ? is his true strength. His weakness however is that through he has had a long time to master these style due to his long age. He hasn't been able to due to several complication. Also he may be strong with these styles, and the roles they play, but they aren't ever as good as someone dedicated to such roleMoveset (Optional):Attack 1 ? Tri-strike. Energy usage: 0 Attack: 2. Hit: 150. Elemental: Back. Special: None Amount of hits: 3, duh. Description: A quick three strikes. Animation: Venator stabs his opponent before slashing them twice. Attack 2 ? Phoenix Strike. Energy usage: 4. Attack: 3.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Red. Special: None. Amount of hits: 4. Description: Embrace the power of the Phoenix to bring down your foe! Animation: Venator?s wings snap out and become covered in flame, as does his weapon; he then launches four arcs of fire at the enemy Attack 3 ? Power of the Beast. Energy usage: 6 Attack: 4.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Black. Special: Uses both Power and Magic. Amount of hits: 6. Description: Unleash the beast from within to savage your opponent! Animation: The spirit of a beast appears above Venator as he performs a tri-strike with the beast attacking with both of its claws and with its fangs. Stats and Perks (Optional): Main PerksBlack Perk - Has multipule style that he can change between at the cost off a turn and five energy.White Perk - Has multipule styles that he can change between at the cost off a turn and 7 energy. Can fly.Green Perk - Has multipule styles that he can between at the cost off a turn and 10 energy. Debuffs due to style differences descrease by 5%Extra Information (Optional): Style This is Venator?s unique mechanic and how his flexibility comes into play. He has a total of 9 fighting styles and he can switch between them at will. It does take a full turn and five energy for him to change his style and however. The first three attacks are the same no matter what, but the last three attacks are dependent on the fighting style. The primary blade he uses switchs per style. One handed Style This is Venator?s default style and he starts each fight with this style. No changes to the first three attacks. Uses the white and the black elements. His second three attacks are: Attack 4 ? Spirit strike. Energy usage: 5 Attack: 4. Hit: 200. Elemental: White. Special: None. Amount of hits: 2. Description: Call upon your inner might to smite your enemies. Animation: Venator gains a faint white aura as he slashes his enemy twice. Attack 5 ? Hidden Venator. Energy usage: 7 Attack: 3.5/5.5. Hit 150/200. Elemental: Black. Special: Last attack ignores defence. Amount of hits: 3/1. Description: Slip in an underhand blow with a hidden blow. Animation: Venator performs a tri-strike, unclipping a dagger from his sword, which he stabs the enemy with. Attack 6 ? Primal Spirit. Energy usage: 12 Attack: 7.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Black/White. Special: Uses both Magic and Power. Amount of hits: 8. Description: Combine the power of your inner might and the beast dwelling within. Animation: Venator gains a white glow and the spirit beast appears above him. Venator attacks the enemies four times (white) while the beast uses it claws, fangs (twice) to attack (black). Two Handed Style Venator grips his sword with two hands, dealing more powerful blows at the cost of accuracy. Damage of the first three attacks goes up by .5 and the accuracy goes down by 50. Attack 4 ? Earthshaker. Energy usage: 6 Attack: 4.5. Hit 150. Elemental: Black. Special: None. Amount of hits: 1. Description: Attack with a strike so powerful it shakes the earth! Animation: Venator jumps up into the air for a powerful downwards slash thay shakes the screen.Attack 5 ? Annihilation. Energy usage: 8 Attack: 7. Hit 100. Elemental: Black. Special: doubles the amount of damage Power adds. Amount of hits: 1. Description: Decimate your enemy by pouring all the strength you have into one strike. Animation: Venator's forearms bulge out before he launches a powerful horizontal slash.Attack 6 ? Atomic Evisceration Energy usage: 13 Attack: 10.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Black. Special: Ignores Defence. Amount of hits: 5. Description: Destroy you enemy all the way down to atoms with this mighty attack. Animation: A black aura surrounds Venator as he strikes fives times.Dual Wielding Style Venator pulls out his secondary blade. This lets him do as twice as many blows and thus 1.5 times as much damage in the first three attack. However the energy useage increases by 75% (first attack increases by 3), and the accuracy decreases by 25%. Uses the Yellow and the Black ElementAttack 4 ? Lightning Barrage. Energy usage: 8 Attack: 7. Hit 100. Elemental: Black and Yellow. Special: None. Amount of hits: 10. Description: Launching this stunning barrage of attacks to simply shock your enemies into defeat. Animation: Venator's swords become's covered in electricity as he dashes forwards, striking five times with each Venator in quick succession.Attack 5 ? Blitz. Energy usage: 12 Attack: 9.5 . Hit 100. Elemental: Black. Special: None. Amount of hits: 20. Description: Bet ya your enemy won't be able to withstand this... Animation: Venator launches a blitzing assault, pushing the enemy back while he deals ten blows with each sword.Attack 6 ? Electric Venator Vortex. Energy usage: 16 Attack: 11.5. Hit 125. Elemental: Yellow and black. Special: Ignores defence. Amount of hits: 1 (continuous). Description: suck you enemies in, then slice them to ribbons. Animation: A vortex appears around the enemy, which Venator then enters, spinning around as he deals uncountable hits with his electricity coated blades.Defence Style Venator again draws his secondary blade, but uses in conjunction with his primary blade for defence. Damage taken is reduced by 10%, but his damage decreases by 25%. Uses the Black elementAttack 4 ? Conservement. Energy usage: 0 Attack: 0.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Black. Special: Uses no stats. Amount of hits: 2. Description: Conserve your energy as you strike at your foe. Animation: Venator stabs the enemy twice.Attack 5 ? Stand Firm. Energy usage: 7 Attack: 0.5. Hit 200. Elemental: Black . Special: Increase's defence by 25 for the rest of the fight (unless defence style is cancelled) as well as increasing it by 250 for that combat. Amount of hits: 1. Description: Stand firm and withstand the enemy assault! Animation: Venator bunkers down before striking the enemy once.Attack 6 ? Health Leach. Energy usage: 9 Attack: 4.5 . Hit 200. Elemental: Black. Special: Gain health at a rate of 50% of damage done . Amount of hits: 1. Description: Draw upon your enemies strength to outlast then in battle. Animation: Venator's blade becomes covered in a dark red aura before he stabs his enemy, leaving the Venator in as 'blood' is pulled into the weapon and through it, into him.Ranged Style Using his wind manipulation, Venator turns his sword into a bow. He gains a range of 3, but can no longer move and attack. Uses the white element.Attack 4 ? Arrow shot. Energy usage: 6 Attack: 5.5. Hit 200. Element: White. Special: Does more damage the further the enemy is, 5% per square. Amount of hits: 1. Description: Launch an arrow at your enemies. Animation: Venator shoots an arrow made out of wind.Attack 5 ? Arrow Barrage. Energy usage: 8 Attack: 6. Hit 200. Elemental: White. Special: Does more damage the closer the enemy is starting at 20% and going down by 5% for each square. Amount of hits: 5. Description: Give your enemy no cahnce to defend against you arrow barrage! Animation: Five arrows are shot in rapid succession.Attack 6 ? Far Shot. Energy usage: 9 Attack: 8. Hit 200. Elemental: White. Special: Can hit an enemy at any range. +2 energy for extra square of range, as well a 5% reduce in damage. Amount of hits: 1. Description: Attack you enimeis from afar with this attack. Animation: Arrow is shot at a 45% angle.Magician's Style Venator brings all of his magical powers to bear, granting him a range of 2 and increasing his energy recovery by 10%. However you take 15% extra damage. Uses Red/Blue/Yellow elements.Attack 4 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 5 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 6 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Punisher Style This style punishes the enemy for high Defence or Resistance. His first three attacks increase in damage by 0.05% per defence or resistance and ignores the said stat. However energy cost increases by 50% (first attack increases by 2) Uses the black element. Attack 4 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 5 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 6 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Primal Phoenix style Venator draws upon the his acient heritage to increase both his power and his magic by 5%. As well as doing adding Red damage to attacks 1 and 3, while adding black damage to attack 2. Uses the white and red element.Attack 4 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 5 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 6 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Overwhelm style. This is without a doubt Venator's most powerful form as he uses all of his blades, multiplying the amount of hits dealt by nine, and the damage by 3.5. His range also increases to two and his attacks ignore defence and resistance, do 0.0.5% extra damage for each damage or resistance as well as attacking with each element. However this is costly as the cost of the attacks increase five fold (with the cost off attack 1 becoming ten) and his energy recovery is stunned... in fact each turn the energy required to control all nine blades reduces the energy pool by five. Uses all elements.Attack 4 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 5 ?. Energy usage: Attack: . Hit . Elemental: . Special: . Amount of hits: . Description: . Animation: .Attack 6 ? Oblieration. Energy usage: All Attack: N/A. Hit Instant hit. Elemental: N/A. Special: Instant kill's any non-boss enemies, and takes out 50% of a bosses hit . Amount of hits: Nine (continuious) . Description: Instant death. Animation: All nine blades attack the enemy at different angles, with many phantom blades following behind them..colorc/co
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QUOTE (Stragas @ Nov 12 2010, 05:11 AM) quotecExan, Odette, and Usama commentsOkay, because Exan, Odette, and Usama are relatively? FLAWLESS? you are off the hook, cham. You and your awesome ability to make blameless characters?.But if I MUST comment? why does everyone make light, athletic built characters wield heavy weapons are beyond me. Those poor characters will be stunted in their growth for life? oh the horror!!!Other than that? you have yourself a solid, AVERAGE team. Now, I am saying that because it really didn?t catch my attention as much. I think you turned conservative and less flashy on your character after EL commented you, but I think you are much better than this? so? add more detail on your character? Please???QuoteEndQuoteEEndThanks, but it wasn't Cham, it was me.And for what it's worth, Usama is the largest of the three, and he wields a light weapon. Your point still stands.I'll see where I can add flair to t
mokona96
I still don't know where you've seen whip/wire combinations before, Stra
allanpike
/coloroDamnit, I wanted to use the daggertail!Nyeh... anyway anyone got any comments on my characters? (Mostly about the mechanic's they have.)colorc/co
mokona96
And Fury's transformation chart is kinda confusing. I think you should just cut that part
allanpike
/coloroBland? How is Blade bland exactly?And how is it confusing? Its a simple table for crying out loud it easy to read!colorc/co
mokona96
2. It makes sense once you figure it out, but the spacing was a bit off and the fractions are kind of confusing at fi
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Name : Xavier KeizerNickname : goes by Xavier still. X for short if you want.Age : 16Biography: A rebellious kid from Seattle, Washington. Xavier's Life has been what he calls too "Pompous, and Glamorous." His parents are filthy rich, and prosperous billionaires due to owning a lot of business in the oil industry. He absolutely hates his parents, Xavier believes that Hard work should be the key to getting fortune, whether it be personal or monetary. He ran away from his parents to live with his grandpa in Boston, Massachusetts. While living there, he has taken an interest in Baseball. From little league, to high school, He has played remarkably throughout his entire play time. He is now currently the captain of his high school baseball team and he endeavors to win the world series one day. Appearance: a Red/White capped kinda long for guy hair (like just floating above the shoulders), Blonde Haired kid. He wears a brown leather jacket, white inside shirt , jeans, Red gloves (with a rectangle in the backhand) , and converse sneakers. Kinda buffed and moderately tall.Personality : He always has a positive attitude usually, no matter the situation, This gives him a team leader feel, although he may be very competitive for it, He does understand the concept of being a team player, and will easily switch roles with any member of his team. Another astounding aspect is his special contagious smile. He cocks his hat down, and has that teeth clenched smirk/smile on his face. Which invigorates his allies, and intimidates his foes.Weapon : The Phoenix Heart Spear.A mythical spear which contains the essence of the majestic phoenix. Its a red spear with flame and feather like engravings. The tip of the spear is the phoenix with its wings/beak out and ready to soar. (the beak/wings are the sharp part.) He can tap the red energies that lie inside it.Fighting Style : He usually uses one hand for slashes with the spear for basic attacks (using his throwing arm), He uses 2 handed thrusts to pierce the enemy. Lastly, He can simulate soaring of the phoenix by tossing his spear becoming a red searing projectile.He uses this fighting style, coupled with his speedy tactics. Moveset: Flight of the Phoenix -> Pretty much a simple one-handed slashing combo sporting 5-6 strikes.Flaming Axle/ Trail Blazer (Couldn't decide on the name)-> Xavier spins his spear like a wheel, as he spins it the flaming energies channel to the tip of the spear. Creating a wheel of fire, he then places the wheel close to the enemy like a buzz saw, burning them rapidly.Searing Thrust-> Xavier lunges back with one of his hands close to the tip of the spear, and the other far from it. He then springs forward from the lunge and pierces the enemy with the incinerating spear. (Prolly should be a bonus of 15% of enemies CURRENT hp into red dmg.)Rebirth-> a full offense 10 strike combo (only used in offense mode) (7 Physical attacks, 3 Red Strikes) (Last 4 strikes will not miss)(Increases power based on how much %HP is missing)Combo should be like -> (1.- 2.) 2 Diagonal Slashes forming an X -> (3.) Horizontal Slash bisecting the X -> (4.) 1 piercing thrust to the center of it -> (5.) 1 Jumping kick to get the thrusted spear out -> (6.) 1 jumping slash downward. -> (7.) Spear uppercut to launch in the air. -> (8.) Upward thrust on the enemy. -> (9.) Downward thrust to send the enemy pummeling towards the ground. -> (10.) A fully charged spear throw to the ground creating an explos
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/coloroquoteo(post=4806:date=Nov 13 2010, 03:54 AM:name=Mokona)QUOTE (Mokona @ Nov 13 2010, 03:54 AM) quotec1. Name. Age and birthplace. Personality is the usual silent type. Physical appearance isn't bland so much as weird.2. It makes sense once you figure it out, but the spacing was a bit off and the fractions are kind of confusing at first.QuoteEndQuoteEEnd1. Right... well I've changed his name so he only uses his origianal name, added a proper age and given him a very interesting birthplace... plus I changed his appearance so its no longer 'wierd' his just your average bidepal feline... except he has wings. Oh and his personalitly isn't the usual silent type. The silent type are usual cold or anti-social, Venator just doesn't like to speak. He is quite a warm guy. Oh and I've changed things so that you take extra damage while using the Magician's style and in Overwhelm style, I've halved the required energy for the first three attacks... from 10x the norm too 5x the norm.What do you think of the style mechanic anyway? (As well as Ressurection abiltiy.)2. Right well I did my best, sorry if its confusing.colorc/co
mokona96
I didn't see the extra damage on Overwhelm, but it works out about the same. +10% damage taken should be fine.The style mechanic is good, albeit hard to use and confusing for anyone not on this forum or not using the strategy guide. Resurrection won't work because after he's dead, his turn won't come up again. You could change the game mechanics slightly for this one character, so that if the energy pool is full, he gets a turn in which all he can do is use it. And, it gets worse as the energy pool increases in size.Also, you can have soulbursted all of your tarots, not just three of them. That would be 12
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/coloroI would hardly call it wierd... and fine, my character is silent. *shrugs*The extra damage is only taken it the Magician's Style.Yeah, it would be a bit confusing... unless described in-game. Saying what all of the styles do (the extra attacks don't have to be mentioned for romm wise) and I've eddited Resurection so that its used on someone elses turn. (Blade doesn't get a turn until everyone else have taken their turn through.)... Let me rexplain something. Say that Death is summoned then soulburst, Arren would then get his +1/12 to his abilities. However if the Priestess is then summoned. That bonus vanishs, and the negative effect from the Tarot being summoned effects him. I didn't want him from getting too powerful.colorc/co
mokona96
Everything else is fine so far, except the birthplace is still confusing. If he's a Jagar/Phoenix hybrid, how the hell was he born inside the Ne
allanpike
/coloroAh well, its normal to be wierd and wierd to be normal!Because that is home of the Jagar.colorc/co
mokona96
1. Why are they the ultimate hunters if they live in the Nexus? I assume that nothing else lives there.2. How the hell do you live in the Nexus? I thought it was a singular point in between all the timelines that no longer has anything to do with anything until Armageddon.3. How did a phoenix get there? Can they travel between timelines or someth
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/coloro1. They live in the Nexus because it is the ultimute hunting ground (of sorts) from there, one can quickly go anyway, so they can hunt whatever they want to.2. No, the Nexus is the origin of the Genenis, but it is also it own land.. if a bit crazy.3. A pheniox was taken their after its life was saved by a Jagar - the people it was fighting knew how to permenttly kill a pheniox.colorc/co
mokona96
2. Point of Genesis = Point of Armageddon. Also, the only timeline that can't branch out.3. Permanently kill a phoenix. Okay. Sure. That kinda makes sense. But how can two semisentient species cross-breed? Doesn't make a lot of se
allanpike
/coloro1. Correct2. Origin of the Genensis, not point of the Genensis, they are two different things.3. How do species cross-breed in the first place?colorc/co
mokona96
3. Exactly. They don't unless they're of similar family and are forced to by outside for
macfluffers
PS- I added attacks to Exan's profile as well as Knight's. I'll see if I can come up with some for the oth